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prompt : ARGUE PRECISELY HOW ONE KEY CHARACTERISTIC OF SBD TECHNOLOGY IS POTENTIALLY DETRIMENTAL TO THE HIGHER-LEVEL THINKING REQUIRED IN UPPER-DIVISION CLASSES AT CSULB. WRITE A PERSUASIVE EDITORIAL FOR THE DAILY 49ER AND THE ACADEMIC SENATE IN WHICH YOU PROPOSE A SPECIFIC POLICY THAT OUR CAMPUS SHOULD ADOPT FOR STUDENTS ON CAMPUS TO HELP CSULB GRADUATES DEVELOP A MORE PRODUCTIVE RELATIONSHIP WITH SCREEN-BASED DEVICES. BE SURE TO PROVIDE CLEAR REASONING FOR WHY THAT YOU THINK THAT POLICY IS IMPORTANT AT CSULB TODAY. ALSO MAKE SURE TO DRAW ON YOUR ACTUAL EXPERIENCES WITH HIGHER-LEVEL THINKING IN UPPER DIVISION CLASSES HERE ON CAMPUS.

required Readings:

Bored and Brilliant by Manoush Zomorodi (See assignment schedule for specific dates and chapters)

Tristan Harris How Better Tech Could Protect Us from Distraction (The TED Talks website has both a video and a transcript, so youre welcome to watch and listen or watch and read along, or both.)

Leslie McClurg Dont Look Now! How Your Devices Hurt Your Productivity (not a required reading for this essay, but you may use it in addition to the Harris and Zomorodi)

Anil Dash Twelve Things Everyone Should Understand about Tech. (an article published at medium.com, link in BeachBoard.)

James Doubek Attention, Students: Put Your Laptops Away from NPR.org